This week for writing we are learning how to use imagery using similes, alliteration, and juicy verbs.
Our cameo was an excerpt from "Joey Pigza Swallowed the key" by Jake Gantos.
I found it easy to use juicy verbs.
I found it tricky to use alliteration.
Sucking and licking the orange rubber spatula, my mouth watered and shook as the full oozing of sugar and chocolate took over my flavourless mouth. Blissful brownie batter slid down my throat like a wet paint slithering down a wall. I savoured every single drop. I scraped the bowl with my finger because that spatula just can't reach the rest. What were fingers made for? I shielded my bowl from my desperate siblings. I looked back at the bowl wondering why it was now so sparkling clean. Then my eyes widened. I was ready to cartwheel 100 times.
Goe Moira Catalina,
ReplyDeleteThere is nothing better than licking the bowl! I agree - that's what fingers are made for...surely! This piece of writing reminded me of racing home from school on 'Baking Day' (always a Thursday) so I could use my finger to get the left over cake mixture from the mixing bowl, lick the beaters AND spatula! My mother always made sure that there was a bit left for me. I still love raw cake mixture!
Maybe next time you could also think about using personification and adding that to your imagery kete.
Mā te wā,
Mrs Naden
Hola Mrs Naden,
DeleteMy Dad is the one who bakes brownies, and I make sure he left some batter for me.
Thank you for your feedback and I will use it next time.
Mā te wā,
Catalina